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fallen angel story by ~DeathSmash:iconDeathSmash:





Fallen angel.

Once her race (the angelins of eden) was a nobel and populated race. A race that once they are neutral they wont hurt a fly. But if they are angry,frustrated or scared the karana (a special force within every angelin) rushes to there arms they will get flames outta there eyes and a special suit that will make them hotter then a hundred suns. The angelins have many fests but the shakura is one of the most important  Yes it was time for the fest the fest of 3600 moons and suns. The shakura. the sun was shining and the birds where flying as always. Sira and her family went out to collect sirup for the dessert they had this very evening. They went out with quite a group because getting the sirup was of real importance it was the only time the angelins would stife down to earth in 10 years. Yes it was a holy fest where lots of the angelins would come together and dance in the shades of 2 moons that would only be there after every 3600 moons. Sira had one very good friend her name was cindra ,a long and beautifull angel with hairs like golden treads and a body an 18 year old girl would be yeallous of. When sira collected enough sirup to fill the town's water well. She rushed back to Eden to help with the preparations. When she walked in the house of cindra the whole room was filled with the smell of cake. Her tummy begun to purr cause she had worked her hands to the bone all day long "would you like a piece of cake sira? nevermind youre tummy allready answers the question"she smiled. Sira rushed to the table to eat a piece hmmm it was delicious. Tonight you should wear the new dress we bought for you. You know the one with all the blue. Maybe he will see you for once cindra mumbled. Sira  looked at her and asked WHO are you talking about? sira begun to blush and cindra smiled. You like him don't you. Sira begun to blush more while cindra aproached her. You like him ADMIT IT. Sira nodded and made her way out the house. Wow the town is pretty empty she thought for this time of the year there should be allot more people around. Though the flags and decorations are hanging. Well it must be sleepy time or something. She heared a noise of flapping wings but it wasn't her own wings cause she was flying foothsteps. And this sounded more like very fast flying. What could it be? Ya know what I better look out and shelter before someone rushes up against me. She hided in a fluffy cloud. The buzzing went louder and louder. Then someone rushed by so fast she couldn't see who it was. But the buzzing still holded on and it wasen't the thing that rushed by very strange then three shades rushed by. Sira startled cause they wheren't angelinians. It couldent be ,could it . naa she thinked it couldent be outcasts they where abanded ages ago because they killed our former king and queen. I do always wonder where they moved after the abandoning. She was raised rather curious. So she went to find out who they where. So she followed the men into a dark cloud rather strange cause in eden there are usually no dark clouds she hided in a piece of cloud and looked. Oh no there where three men fightin a angelin a men she didn't recognize him cause he was wearing armor. But the three creatures she did recognize they where ghouls greasy black critters with black hear what was all over them and a body of a fat maggot they had infections all over and smelled like death also they had four arms who where filled with tiny holes the darkest creatures that could fly they never have any trouble with them cause they hide in the shade. There where three now sira couldent handel these creatures but she still kept watching. The man in the armor was fighting the critters. His eyes where allready flamed but sira couldent see if it was fear or anger that made him do it. The man got kicked hard and stiked back. With his sword he pierced one of the ghouls black liquid streamed out the vanes of the just hitted creature. the other two saw that there partner was floored not yet dead. They started to charge not on the gaurdian but on the striked ghoul. While he tried to flee the striked ghoul got pushed down to the ground and first his hand got ripped of he screamed as loud as a ghoul could what was a deafening sound. Sira looked up and saw that the guardian was allready fled. The ghouls looked up into the air and begun to sniff with there hairy nose holes they could smell anything from a distance of 5km. Sira begun to set of in the air witch wasent the best point of ghouls who didn't have the muscles to start a flight. They saw sira flee but did nothing they just continued eating there "friend". When sira came back home her eyes where shocked cindra asked what happened and sira just sat there saying nothing. There being knocked at the door. Who could that be?


To be contineud
©2007-2009 ~DeathSmash
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wow i hope you enjoyed ^^
tell me what i can change so i can do it...duh please read the whole piece in the end it becomes more exciting^^

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:iconah-grasshopper:
honey, to write a story you need to 'set the scene' which you did, the story has a sound basis, and I'd like to read the next chapter :D
:icondeathsmash:
haha thank you^^ especially since english isnt my first language^^

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Ohhhhhh exciting. You need speech marks in it though, around when the people are talking.

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you mean "blablabla"she said. lik that

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:iconah-grasshopper:
well, there were spelling mistakes but it didn't matter, it's easy to understand what you meant, you did good :D :hug:
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thanks

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